Introduction to piece two

For this piece i choose to revise my Food and Family blog. This blog talked about how food relates to your family. I choose this piece because after I went back and re-read it i realized that i could have done a much better job writing and and that i didn't really capture the feel that i wanted to. I started editing it by changing my introduction to the the piece , I thought it was much to boring and decided to go with a more exciting approach. It was this "In my family the food in every holiday plays a big part of the tradition." I changed it to this "Growing up in my family there was only one time a day where we all come together out of our busy schedules to sit down and talk, that was dinner time. " Also realized that the piece was a little short and not very descriptive. After i realized that i went through and added more writing and description to the food and the place. I went through and found spelling mistakes and changed some of the wording so it would sound better to the reader. I added more detail about the food and why we have it so that the reader would get a since of familiarity. so I hope you enjoy my newly revised Food and Family piece.